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Part 1, Part 2, Part 3, Part 4

part 5

The next morning Jared woke to find Jenny laying at his side her head resting on his chest. He smiled and threaded his fingers through her hair. The movement woke her. Apparently pleased to see him she started to lick his chest and inch her way closer to his face.

Abruptly she stopped. Jared watched her face contort in pain when she accidentally pressed her hip against him and subsequently the wounded skin under her bandage.

Jared sat up and gently inspected it before he scooted back and rested against the headboard. He leaned back down to cup Jenny’s chin to have her look at him as he reprimanded her. “Baby, you’re going to have to be careful and let it heal properly. I’ll have Misha look at it and change the dressing when he gets here, okay?”

Jenny reached out to lick what she could of his hand. Jared nodded the corners of his mouth lifting as he accepted her apology. “Good I’m glad you understand. I know you probably need to go potty and we’ll go out in just a bit, but first I want you to pay attention. I think I need to spell out what’s going to happen in the next few days.”

Jared couldn’t have been more pleased when Jenny held his gaze, listening intently to her daddy.

“Though you’re healing and still going through your transition I’ve been put into a position where I have to push you through your training process. Something you would have had to go through eventually – unfortunately the way things are now you only have the rest of the week to learn everything.”

Jared swallowed and averted his eyes feeling guilty that she had to endure so much in such a short span. Inhaling he pushed through his anxiety. “I realize you heard us yesterday, but let me explain. In a few days, I’ll be hosting a party - a cotillion. Among my guests, several of the Elders of the Association’s council, will be here. Their objective will be to judge you. How they score and rank you are going to have a direct reflection on me and any political ambitions I have. Each hybrid trans bitch is judged for beauty, intelligence, obedience and her reaction on how she behaves while mounted.”

Jared paused, “Although your body is adjusting extremely well, you’re still developing and won’t be in a full heat cycle. Thankfully you are self-lubricating and have responded well to the dildos, but being mounted by your stud is different. Harley is more like you than you think. He isn’t a typical canine. Although his outward physical appearance is full canine, like you his physiology has been modified and he is capable of impregnating you with a litter. Also though most canines are wildly amorous around a bitch in heat, Harley and studs like him have an increased need to mount their bitches at any time – in this case, mount you.”

“Harley’s older and well trained, which is why he didn’t just attack and mount you right away, but you were also more human than bitch. If he was a pup like you, your scent of lubrication would have dictated his actions and he would have mounted you. That’s why one of your body modifications is self-lubrication. However when you’re mounted during your actual heat cycle you’ll be fertile and capable of breeding a litter.”

“It’s the Elders judgment that will classify you, decide with who I can breed you to. Do you understand?”

Jenny’s eyes dropped as if she was processing what he said.

Though he heard the hitch in his voice basically begging her to understand, it didn’t stop him from trying. “Baby, there’s so much I can do politically within the Association, but if I’m going to get in the door it’s imperative you receive high scores. You’re mine, the branding makes that clear so they can’t take that away from me, but I want just as much freedom in picking your stud. The higher you rank the more freedom I have in matching and picking the right stud to breed you with during your cycle.” Jared reached out and lifted Jenny’s head, and met her green eyes. He saw the intelligence, along with her confusion as her eyes flicked back and forth as she tried to figure things out. His hands caressed her face as he held her gaze. “What I’m asking is that you listen and obey me to the letter on everything. Think you can do that, baby?”

It was easy to read the doubt in her face, but slowly her head bobbed up and down in-between his hands. Excited, Jared pulled her up and gave her kisses. For every kiss he gave she responded with an excited lick. Jared started to laugh thrilled with her response. “Okay baby, we got to calm down. Let me go to the head then brush my teeth then it’ll be your turn.” Jared got up and grabbed his cell and called Sam downstairs as he headed into the bathroom.

“Morning. Yes Sam, she’s fine. We’ll be down in a few minutes and you can judge for yourself. I just wanted to know if Misha was here? No, that’s okay I think we can wait until he checks her out. Are the feeders in place? The post fully supplied? Good after I take her out to go potty, I’ll show her. I’ll see you in a bit.”

After donning new sweats Jared glanced up and saw the collar he’d gotten for Jenny sitting on his dresser. Picking it up, Jared rubbed his thumb over the soft leather. Hearing a mew, he looked up into the mirror to see Jenny sitting uncomfortably on her side. Folding the leather Jared tucked the collar into his back pocket, and quickly moved to her side. “Alright baby, we’re going. I’m going to carry you down. You’re not quite strong enough to crawl down by yourself just yet. Though once we get downstairs I’m going to put you down on your knees, so you can crawl the rest of the way yourself.”

As careful as he was Jenny still winced in pain when he picked her up; Jared didn’t know if the cause was the branding or her bladder. Judging by way her face continued to scrunch up, Jared believed it might be her bladder. More than half way down the stairs Jared made a judgment call. “I can see you really have to go I’m going to just take you outside, hold on.”

At the bottom of the stairs Jared headed for the living room calling out for Sam or Steve to open the door for him. It was Steve that rushed passed him to open the sliding doors. As Jared passed Steve, he told Steve to get him some knee pads. Outside Jared immediately headed to the lawn at the edge of the patio. He put Jenny down near the puppy training post he had Chris install yesterday. The post was specially designed and large enough to enclose toys, an extra leash, a chain link, wipes, and a scooper including the bags to scoop up waste. The scooper hung on the outside by the eyebolt that could be was used to attach her collar to the chain link if he ever had to punish her and leave her outside.

Puzzled she stared up at him. Encouragingly Jared cheered her on, pointing to the grass. “Go on girl go pee, I’ll watch. Go on.”

He could see as badly as she had to go, she didn’t think he meant she was suppose to relieve herself outside. The humanity of shame crept up on her face.

Patiently Jared waited.

He hated having to rush her like this; to expect the remains of her humanity to instantly disappear was absurd, but it was something like this that could bring her score down with the judges. Though many found it entertaining to watch a bitch break, Jared wasn’t one of them. He had taken months to cultivate Jenny’s physical health to this point. If he could have had his way he would have taken the extra weeks he needed to guide and help her embrace her new life.

Squatting down, Jared tried to talk to her and softly encourage her. “Come on girl I know you can do it. Just go out there and squat a little in order to pee. You’ll feel a lot better once you do. Remember what I said before about listening and obeying. This is what I meant.”

Jenny looked from him then shifted to look out to the yard. Her head hung low, but she started to move and crawled out into the yard. Three feet out, she stopped and spread her knees to squat down to relieve herself. At first nothing happened, but a moment later a stream gushed out hitting the grass. Jared stood, clapping as he happily cheered her on, “Good girl.” His relief was tangible, pleased they’d cleared their first hurdle of the day. Once she finish, Jenny turned silently questioning him on what she was suppose to do now.

He didn’t think she did, but he had to ask. “Do you have to go potty? Make a poop?”

Though Jenny appeared mortified by the idea she shook her head no. “Okay then, come here girl.” Jared waited until she was close enough, and allowed his fingers to dance over her head, in comforting touches. “Oh baby you were such a good girl making pee when you’re supposed to. So so pretty too. I’m proud of you girl, you did a good job.” Jared grabbed a wipe from the post. “Though next time don’t hesitate, okay?” He bent down to wipe any residual drips and urine splatters off of Jenny’s cock and inner thighs then tossed the wipe into the small bin at the bottom of the post. Above the bin in the post there was a door which Jared opened. Inside the narrow compact space were shelves to hold various supplies, but mainly plugs of various sizes some with tails others without. Finally deciding on a size and style, Jared pulled it out and closed the door.

“I’m going to plug you now, it’s how you’re going to be from now on whenever you’re not available to Harley.” Jared guided Jenny to present her rear, “Lift your ass up and spread a bit wider. Now lower your chest, a little more. Good girl. This is called presenting. I want you to get in this position anytime I ask you to present.” Jared petted her back down to the curve of her ass. His fingers probed her crack prying her cheeks apart, to see the glistening moisture. He ran the egg shaped head of the plug over her hole and pushed. Watching with interest as Jenny’s hole easily swallowed it. He pushed and held it there stretching her rim at its widest width and rotated it until he felt Jenny shiver and try to push back. Jared laughed pleased to see her eager response. He stopped teasing and shoved the plug all the way in. It’s narrow end locking the plug in place where its tail curved up. Jenny whined, in need and clenched her cheeks around the plug that caused the tail wag up and down.

Jared smile and playfully slapped her ass enjoying the sight as the tail continued wagging.

Reaching around, Jared grabbed the collar from his back pocket, and brought it around for Jenny to see. “This, here is yours.” Unfastening the collar, Jared gently wrapped the collar around Jenny’s neck. His thumb guided her chin, “Lift up,” so he could buckle the collar and test it by inserting two fingers under the collar to make sure it was tight, but loose enough it wouldn’t chafe her skin.

Once he was satisfied, Jared pulled back to take a look. Pleased, his hand cupped her face until she shifted and nuzzled his palm. He heard someone coming up behind him and expected Steve, but it was Jeff who handed Jared the specially designed knee pads. “Looks good on her; Steve said you needed these.”

Jared replied, “Thanks.” and took the knee pads. “I didn’t expect to see you here.”

“Like Misha and Sam, Chris and I opted to stay the night. Thought you might want some help…”

Jared didn’t know what to say. Jeff was a good friend and had been for years. He had even introduced Jeff to Chris, who was now his life partner. However ever since Jeff retired their political views regarding the Association had clashed even the training of pups was often disputed. Jared nodded though he was nervous. “I appreciate the sentiment, but we both know you hate training under Association guidelines as much as you do their evaluations. I’m on a deadline here and need to get high scores. Don’t get me wrong I seriously appreciate your expertise in branding her and letting me borrow Chad, but I can’t afford to be lax.”

“Not asking you to. You’re right I hate the Association’s methods. Why I left their inner circle, but don’t be an ass. You know I know them, every rule, every training technique and have more experience dealing with them than anyone else here. In my book that puts you at an advantage.” Jeff hesitated, his hand rubbing against his neck. “Listen,” he looked up and met Jared’s eyes, “Chris keeps telling me I’m a stubborn sonofabitch, that it takes me awhile to really listen. What I’m trying to say is I get what you’re trying to do, and I believe she can get you there – with my help.”

Shocked Jared could only ask, “You’re sure?”

“Wouldn’t be here otherwise.”

“Alright then, I’m happy to have you help out.”

“Good. Why don’t you put those on her and while she’s having breakfast we can discuss strategy.”

Bending down, Jared replied, “Sounds good.”


Jared was still reeling from the idea that Jeff was going to oversee his training of Jenny. Though retired, Jeff was well renowned in his field and knew the ins and outs of training a pup. Once he had put Jenny’s knee pads on, he patted her side and stood. The morning suddenly seemed chipper as Jenny crawled at his side.

Their first stop was the kitchen where Jeff poured both of them both a cup of coffee while Jared led Jenny over to the feeder.

It was a calf feeder set on the wall hanging about three feet off the floor. “Okay baby, for now until the cotillion is over you’re restricted to a liquid diet. Don’t worry, it has all the nutrients you need, you definitely won’t starve while you’re drinking this. It’s the same formula you love and have already been drinking regularly. See this?” Jared pointed to the end of the large feeder. “Like a nipple from any of the bottles you’ve been using, so you’ll need to use steady suction. However there’s a valve inside, to open it you have to bite and push it open with your teeth. It was designed to prevent Harley or any other stud from getting to it.”

Squatting down, Jared asked. “Go ahead let me see you do it?”

Cautiously Jenny moved toward the feeder and stretched her neck up to mouth the teat. Her eyes darted to Jared questioning him. “That’s it now use your teeth. You have human teeth so concentrate and clamp down with your front teeth and pull until you hear a click. Go ahead you’re not going to break it.”

He watched as Jenny tried to work her teeth the way Jared wanted. It took a couple of tries before she had the valve open enough to release the milk. He rewarded her by soothingly patting her back and allowing her to suckle the milk down.

As Jenny got the hang of it Jared stepped back and watched. Jeff was suddenly at his side handing him his coffee. “I have to say you’re a natural. Not many people in your position have the patience to do what you’re doing taking a hybrid bitch in and train her. Those with the money would usually pass her off to some handler and ninety percent of them don’t have the brains to wipe a bitch’s ass never mind train one.”

Under Jeff’s high praise, Jared bowed his head and took a sip of coffee. It did nothing to hide the gratifying smile that stretched across his face.

“After she feeds, I think you should have Misha check her vitals and dressings. If they started to scab over, then the bandage can probably be removed.”

“What do you think we should do first?”

Jeff stopped and turned toward him, obviously pleased that Jared was serious and ready to accept his advice. “Chris mentioned you have the place wired and video tapped Harley and Chad.”

Jared licked his lips suddenly nervous because he hasn’t actually asked Jeff. While Chris and Jeff were together, Chad actually belonged to Jeff not Chris.

“Don’t worry about it though I want to get a copy.”

Relieved Jared answered. “Of course.”

“Chris mentioned you had plans to show Jenny what to expect, how a good bitch responds. I think that’s a good idea. Today spend the day letting her get acclimated to the house and her new position. Take her out for walks around the house and let her play. Pull the breeding bench out; let her get accustomed to the feel of it. Like I said before use the staff - walk her around the perimeter as if they were the Elders, put her on display. Let them feel and exam her. It’ll be better if she’s skittish with them than the Elders.”

Jared bobbed his head at each suggestion. “When should I let Harley mount her?”

“I’d give the brand a chance to really scab over first. Hybrids heal fast, so I’d say tomorrow, but double check with Misha, when he examines her. Thankfully Harley’s a randy stud; will be even more so since I just cut him off from Chad this morning. Tomorrow he’ll be raring to go.”

Jared slumped against the counter. He wanted to say thanks, but the word stuck in his throat because suddenly he was feeling selfish. Over the last few months he had planned out every detail where he slowly pushed and guided Jensen’s hybrid instincts into taking over. Waiting for the day when he’d finally couldn’t resist Harley and Jensen would fall to his knees. As the fantasy unfolded, Jared would surprise him by coming home early. His favorite scenario always played out in one of two ways, where either: Jensen panicked when he saw Jared and tried to get away, but Harley wasn’t having it and neither would he. Though he’d pretend to be in shock, he’d go over and kneel beside Jensen, ordering him to stay where he was, that he was Harley’s bitch now. How he’d encourage Harley to fuck his pussy, to shove his knot into his wet hole. Or that when he walked in Jensen’s hormonal instincts had already kicked into overdrive where he responds naturally - a bitch happily zoned out in pleasure, pushing back taking Harley’s knot. Both fantasies he’s replayed regularly however neither fantasy included his staff watching; at least not initially.

Jeff softly stated. “You can still ease her into it, start out slow, and have the first time private – make it special.”

Jared turned and blushed, belatedly realizing how much he had given away. Embarrassed, he felt compelled to explain, but Jeff read him and shook his head, shrugging. “No need. I get it; Chad’s nearly as special to me as Jenny is to you.”

Jared was about to say something but Jeff cut him off again and pointed. “I think you need to focus.”

Jared looked in the direction Jeff pointed to. Jenny was patiently sitting there waiting for him; she had finished the entire bottle.

“Better take her out to pee again. Probably every two hours if she keeps drinking like that. But don’t worry it’s a good sign. You go do that and I’ll go tell Misha to meet you outside. This morning I wanted him to check Chad over.”

Surprised Jared couldn’t help but voice his concerned. “She okay? Was Harley too rough?”

“No she’s fine; I just wanted Misha to double check. Harley made good use of his opportunity and pounded her hole good. Obviously in frustration that Chad wasn’t the bitch he wanted.” Jeff patted his shoulder as he left leaving Jared alone in the kitchen with Jenny.

Jared jutted his chin out as he asked her. “Did you hear us and pay attention?”

Jenny bobbed her head up and down.

“Then let’s go outside and you can go pee again.” Opening the door Jared waited as Jenny made her way toward him.

At the lawn’s edge, he reached out to stop her and asked, “Do you have to make poop yet?” Though she shook her head no, Jared could see the dread and shame reflected in her eyes, that it was going to be a big hurdle. Jared squatted until he was eye level. “I can see that you hate the idea, but you’re a doggie. Granted technically a puppy still all puppies go outside.” She tried to avert her eyes but Jared forced her to look at him. “If I have to use enemas and keep you diapered I will, but know the diapers are only for newborns, sick doggies” Jared paused for effect, “and bad doggies. I don’t want you injuring yourself. You’re plugged now so I have to know. Now are you sure you don’t have to make poo?”

Jared watched her carefully, as she nodded no. “Okay, then go on and pee. I’ll be right here watching you.” Although she didn’t rush out onto the lawn, Jared did notice he didn’t have to prod her any further unlike earlier. She had just finished going when Misha called out. Coming up behind Misha and running past him was Harley, barking his excitement.

Immediately Jared responded and bent down greeting Harley as he jumped up in his enthusiasm giving him kisses.

When Misha reached him, he stood there watching then announced, “Nine, eight, seven, six…”

Jared was about to ask Misha what the hell he was doing, when Harley pulled away from him and ran after Jenny. Harley greeted her just as enthusiastically as he had Jared possibly more so. Jared held his breath and waited anxiously to see how Jenny would act.

Harley licked her face then walked around her body. He stopped to sniff at the bandage before moving around to her ass, licking around the plug. They watched as Jenny’s tail picked up rhythm, wagging. Harley didn’t give her time to think as he tried to mount her. His hind legs bouncing as his hips gave purpose and started humping.

Jared was about to order him off, but Misha stopped him. “Don’t worry she’s plugged. Besides as much as he’d like to knot her, I don’t think he can get it up right now. He kept Chad quite busy.” Misha chuckled, “Unlike Jenny there.”

Jared shifted to see what Misha was talking about and saw Jenny’s cock had filled and stood erect bouncing against her stomach.

“What about her branding?”

“I’m watching, but I think she’ll be fine. See…” Harley had gotten down and moved until his head was at Jenny’s crotch sniffing and licking her cock.

Relived Jared only huffed, when Misha stated what he was thinking. “Guess you were right he does like her cock.” A moment later they watched as Jenny shook and whimpered under Harley’s administrations and came happily spurting come for her stud. Brightly Misha said, “Well that didn’t take her long.”

Jared silently agreed and watched as Jenny rolled over onto her side allowing Harley better access by spreading her legs.

However what Jared loved was what he saw next as Jenny lifted her torso up and sniffed at Harley’s ass. Harley paused and lifted his tail just as Jared held his breath, waiting to see what Jenny would do. It was tentative at first, but Jenny stretch out her tongue and lapped over Harley’s ass. Barely a second had gone by when she did it again building up a rhythm as she licked excitedly over Harley’s ass and then over his balls and cock.

Misha nudged him. “Her senses are kicking in.”

Jared nodded then noticed Harley was sporting only a bit of pink, and outright laughed knowing his boy really had spent his energy on Chad. Although Harley didn’t seem to care as he happily panted under Jenny’s administrations and acceptance before he turned backed to the task of cleaning up his girl. After he had finished he pulled away and happily bounced around barking ready to play a new game.

At first Jenny seemed too dazed, but then pulled herself up and crawled toward Harley as she reached him she nuzzled her face against his. Harley licked her face then turned around initiating a new game that slightly resembled tag in-between wrestling play.

Misha clasped his back. “Go ahead and let them play. I’ll check her out afterwards.”

Jared barely acknowledged Misha when he left; too amazed as he watched their antics going from light sexual play to just play. Jenny was beyond everything he had ever hoped to have in a companion for Harley, but even more important, down the road after her first litter she was someone that’d be his and he’d happily share her with Harley.

Only his anxiety over the cotillion dampened his happiness. He just had to get Jenny through the training, teach her enough that she’d get high enough scores. It wasn’t enough that Harley be allowed to mount her, he wanted Harley to sire Jenny’s litter. He only hoped and prayed that she achieved high enough scores from the Elders to allow that to happen.

He had a week, and between his staff and friends, there was hope, and he had to hang on to that. Jared slowly inhaled then exhaled, he would get Jenny through it he had to, not just for Harley, but for himself. He loved her and seeing how well they were together only filled his heart with joy.



Date: 2012-01-21 07:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dirtysockqueen.livejournal.com
You know I think this turned out awesome. :) I love the idea of the Association and this society of people that have their human bitches. I look forward to seeing more in this 'verse!

Date: 2012-01-21 08:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
Thank you, and no worries I'm already working on the next part - your art does help to keep me inspired =)

Date: 2012-01-21 02:59 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] princesslanie.livejournal.com
ekkkkkkkkkkk, you end'd it nooooo. we need more please.

Date: 2012-01-21 09:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
...you end'd it

Only because I had a due date - otherwise the dam thing is going strong. The next part will be the training & the Cotillion, and I imagine it'll be almost as lengthy as p1. So it'll take me a little time, but you can help [livejournal.com profile] smidgeson to keep me from straying.

Thank you for giving it a read =)

Date: 2012-01-21 10:42 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] princesslanie.livejournal.com
yay happy to be a cheerleader, sis boom bah. i friend you so i won't miss anything.

Date: 2012-01-22 03:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
Friended back ;)

Date: 2012-01-21 03:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alezig.livejournal.com
Oh, there needs to be more. SO much more! I loved this and it's a very interesting world that you've created here

Date: 2012-01-21 09:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
There is, the story just didn't want to be condensed. Right now I believe it'll be in 3 parts with the training & Cotillion in p2. Thank you for reading I hope you'll come back and enjoy p2 when its posted =)

Date: 2012-01-21 03:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] yahel26.livejournal.com
I would love to read more from Jenny pov now that she accepted her future as a bitch.
Thank you so much for sharing <33

Date: 2012-01-21 09:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
Hee, thank you!!! Yes, there'll be more of Jenny's pov in later parts. Thank you so much for taking the time to read & send fb ;)

Date: 2012-01-21 05:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] igorsmaster.livejournal.com
Definitely need to see some more of this!! This was awesome! :D

Date: 2012-01-21 09:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
\o/ yeah ♥ that you liked it, and yes there will be more =)

Date: 2012-01-22 05:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tsukido.livejournal.com
this is AMAZING. I love how gentle Jared is towards poor confused Jensen!! Thank you for sharing with us >:)
Will check back this daily for updates!

Date: 2012-01-22 05:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
Thank you, I'm very happy you liked it \o/

I'll be adding tags later today and will be posting wc very few days (it helps me to stay focused). However I don't expect I'll finish it that quickly. Also I'd like to do one big chunk instead of small chapters. Meaning the next part will probably be nearly as long as this part, so I suggest you track it. If you watch any wc posts, cheering me on or poking me is highly encouraged ;)

Date: 2012-01-22 07:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] freesme.livejournal.com
Dittoing (is that even a word) what everyone else said. There needs to be more more more! Can't wait! I think you've got a great world built up so far. Jared better keep his girl away from those evil-ish Elders!

I saw all the influences you mentioned, but this is totally different at the same time. I like how you made Jared a good guy and gave him empathetic motivations.

Great job, will definitely be back when there's more!

Date: 2012-01-22 05:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
Awesome, thank you!!!

Check back later today I should have tags up by then so you can track it. (Just deciding on what to name the verse)

Date: 2012-01-23 06:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hannahbellejude.livejournal.com
Great story! Very interesting society you've created. Looking forward to more :D

Date: 2012-01-23 03:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
Thank you!! I think you know I hated leaving it end there. I was definitely disappointed I couldn't get to the cotillion, but I promise in part 2 there will be plenty of porn with full penetration before and during the cotillion ;)

Date: 2012-01-23 12:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] eternal-moonie.livejournal.com

What an AWESOME story from start to finish!

Can't wait for more!

Date: 2012-01-23 03:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
Yay, I'm so pleased you liked it =)

& I'm writing p2 now!

Date: 2012-01-23 04:00 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] liliaeth
This is a very scary world you've created. On one hand, Jared is kind and caring, but on the other he took away Jensen's every choice about his future, his entire life really.

Can't wait to read more.

Date: 2012-01-24 03:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
Twirls, coming from you, awesome praise - thank you!!

Date: 2012-01-24 03:03 am (UTC)
sylsdarkplace: Aubrey Beardsley's Salome & St John (Default)
From: [personal profile] sylsdarkplace
I'm glad to see a tbc because there's so much I still want to know.

"The humanity of shame crept up on her face." I'm really bothered here by Jared putting his political ambition before Jensen's well-being.

"down the road after her first litter she was someone that’d be his and he’d happily share her with Harley." Really interesting use of language "she was someone" -- not a dog, a person. Sharing her with Harley -- I wonder when the time comes if that will be true.

This is fascinating, and I'll be interested to see where it goes.

Date: 2012-01-24 10:52 am (UTC)
sylsdarkplace: Aubrey Beardsley's Salome & St John (Default)
From: [personal profile] sylsdarkplace
See what you've done. I'm still thinking. I'm interested to know where this hybrid breeding program came from and why. How did the Association become so powerful and what exactly is its purpose?

I also don't get a sense yet of how acceptable humans having sex with hybrids is. Jared suggests at the end that he intends to have sex with Jensen, but it is unclear when his friends exchange looks earlier (when he puts Jensen in his bed) whether they consider it a perversion or just a little unusual.

Early on Sam and others assumed that Jensen was a mutt. I'm assuming that's is the offspring of a pedigree hybrid that mated with a human? Does that mean that Jared get Jensen pregnant or am I misunderstanding?

Sheesh, no wonder I'm so tired. I must have been thinking about this all night. ;)

Again, great fic. You've built such an interesting verse here.

Association, breeding program

Date: 2012-01-24 04:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
Oops, I might have answered the wrong one - need more coffee.

Ha, see you picked things that probably won't be touched on much in p2 (as that will be mainly the training and the cotillion). P3 will address after the cotillion. How much back story I honestly don't know at this point. I have an idea of what p3 is going to be about, but I really just need to focus on writing and getting out p2 in a timely matter. This is when I wish I wrote as quickly as you do ;)

When I'm in p3 I'll make sure I re-read fbs to address as many as I can ;)

Oh though one I can answer right now - it is acceptable by the 'Association' to use human-bitches as sex toys. The scene with Jared and Martin, and Martin thought Jared would make use of Jensen right away. Jared stated for health reasons he wouldn’t and planned to wait until after Jensen had his first litter when there’d be no health risk to Jensen or her pups.

So Misha and Jeff’s looks were more of Jared letting Jenny in his bed instead of keeping her in the birthing nest as was Association’s tradition for new born pups.

♥ thank you for the fb and all your thinky thoughts =)
Edited Date: 2012-01-24 04:20 pm (UTC)

Re: Association, breeding program

Date: 2012-01-24 04:25 pm (UTC)
sylsdarkplace: Aubrey Beardsley's Salome & St John (Default)
From: [personal profile] sylsdarkplace
Oh right, I'd forgotten the details of Martin and Jared's conversation. Thanks.

Date: 2012-01-24 04:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
Huh, I just wrote you thinking I'd hold off responding, but re-reading I realized some I can't really answer without spoiling. So a good majority isn't written just sitting in my head. Meaning it could change as my muse loves to throw me curve balls. (ie in this part with Sam, the bottle feeding/diapers, branding, Jeff/Chris, Chad I had no idea until I was actually writing it.)

However at this point, I'd say the above will be hinted at in p2 and (sorry to say) addressed more thoroughly in p3, but will be addressed =)

Date: 2012-01-24 04:18 pm (UTC)
sylsdarkplace: Aubrey Beardsley's Salome & St John (Default)
From: [personal profile] sylsdarkplace
Haha, I know the feeling about muse throwing curve balls.

Looking forward to more.

Date: 2012-01-30 06:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] petmouser.livejournal.com
I was so glad to hear you're already working on the next installment in this 'verse because I really enjoyed this first part and almost screamed at my computer when I got to the end :D

I'm so ready to find out what happens at this mysterious cotillion ceremony. And about a million other things. Really top notch worldbuilding in this one. Thanks for sharing such an interesting story!

Date: 2012-02-08 04:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
Thank you!!! Atm its slow going, but still going ;)

Date: 2012-02-07 11:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] chaigrl2786.livejournal.com
Your story is fantastic! I just got done reading it a second time. It is a perfect mix of porn, submission, and plot. If that makes any sense. I can't wait to read the next installment. Until then, take care and Happy Writing!

Date: 2012-02-08 04:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
Twice, wow thank you!!

My goal is to have it complete for the next round of kinky_bang. Sadly it’s a ways off, but then this isn't just another 10k- its way longer than I ever intended. Hopefully it'll be worth the wait ;)

Date: 2012-02-10 11:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mystic-reader.livejournal.com
I've really enjoyed this so far! Looking forward to reading more!

Date: 2012-02-18 03:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
Yay, thank you!!

Date: 2012-02-18 08:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kebab1806.livejournal.com
I absolutely loved this and can't wait to read more :)

Date: 2012-03-17 04:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tealight-b.livejournal.com
Thank you!!

So sorry for the long delayed response rl's been a royal pain-in-the-ass!! The good news I have signed up for round 2 of [livejournal.com profile] spn_kinky_bang and will be writing this verse =)

Date: 2012-03-17 05:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kebab1806.livejournal.com
*points at icon*


Date: 2012-04-05 08:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] calijirl5150.livejournal.com
Your a meanie - leaving us hanging ;p JK. This fic is very well written, it pulled me in. Kinda like a car wreck you just can
't look away.

Friended you BTW, love all your fics I have read so far, making my way through them all :)
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